Exo Chika (terrorxvixen) wrote in asiaunderground,
Exo Chika
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Claim//Exo Chika

Your LJ: candy_lolita
Your AIM: candy gyaru

Muse's Name: Exo-Chika
Muse's Band: Aural Vampire
Muse's LJ: terrorxvixen
Muse's AIM: Flaming calamare

 

Muse's Age: 25

Muse's Affiliation: Yakuza,Fourth Yamaken-gumi,Kumicho

Muse's Job:Full-time Yakuza Boss

Sample Post: 
The blonde stood in the low-lit area of the club.She was in short leather shorts,a garter belt holding up a pair of black and red fishnets.Her waist was held in a tight bunch with the black and red silk corset.Her common black lace gloves elegantly covering her pale skin.
Exo Chika was certainly not the common Yakuza-boss.She was a woman,even had vampire teeth.Even though she was born into the yakuza,she worked her way up to her current position.She had killed many people,and sold a hell of alot drugs.She even sold
herself.

Most people would say she was rather-sadistic.She would agree with them.She worked by using force.As Hitler even said,"You can't cure stupidity with vaccines,but you can cure it by brute force.".Exo Chika was certainly a bitch.Not even having a care about anyone other then herself.Her wellfare was more important than anything,well not as much as her work.

Her cellphone rung.Checking the caller I.D. she flipped open the cellphone."I thought I told you to have the fucking 3,000,000 yen..No don't say that to me.I gave you 3 weeks,that was rather considerate of me,especially for the job I did for you.I'm going to give you a little visit.Be ready.Don't fucking move an inch.",oh was she excited! She rarely took on assination herself.Only in certain situations.But she loved it dearly.

Brushing her long blonde hair to the side she smiled as she head threw the over crowded club.Her fangs glistening in the random flashes of light.Exo Chika's long fingers reached for her hidden blades in her boot.


Comments: Can she be Kumicho? Is that alright? *laughs*

Sorry if this sample wasn't the best.I typed it with one hand and my friend was distracting my train of thought.*laughs*
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Both myself and my co-mod are extremely swamped at the moment, so please forgive us if we don't accept either of your applications right away.
There are a few things I'd like to mention, though, such as keeping in mind that in English we always put a space between punctuation and the next word. It's a lot easier to read. I noticed several spelling errors in both of your applications, but I'm inclined to give you the benefit of the doubt because of your broken hand. Still, if you do have trouble with English spelling it's okay to use the Spell Check tool provided by LiveJournal or the Spelling and Grammar tool in Microsoft Word and we do in fact encourage that.

Concerning the content of the applications, all we need to make clear is how Exo-chika became kumicho at her age. You mention in your sample post that she's done a lot of killing. Would it be safe to assume that she pretty much killed her way to the top?
For example, my main muse Yuuga, he's kumicho of the Goto-gumi at 26 because he murdered the old kumicho in a hostile takeover and then killed anyone who opposed his new leadership.
There are only certain ways that someone so young would become kumicho and overthrowing the old regime would be a classic, simple, and very valid one. So please let us know about that.

Other than that, if you could just go back and fix the spacing problem and as many of the spelling errors as you can, we would appreciate it. There's no rush. We're both going to be unavailable until probably Tuesday and we'll make our final decision on your applications then. Okay?

Thanks. ^^
Sorry about the spelling,I'm usually pretty good with spelling,but it's hard when I have a metal thing on my index and middle finger.But I will make sure to fix it before tuesday!

Um with the kumicho thing.Can you make her a Shatei? I will go re-write the app. If I have to~

But thank you for giving me the benifit of doubt! I'm fluent in english but my hand is deciding to not like me at the moment.
Thank you very much. Just please go and change her rank from Kumicho to Shatei and you're accepted. For Ruki, too. (too lazy to go say that in that post. haha)